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雅思作文没话说?试试这样拓展!

2017-01-05

来源:环球教育

小编:Eileen 128
摘要:

  雅思写作板块估计是中国学生心中永远的痛,不少烤鸭即使是听力和阅读分数很高,但是在作文方面依旧需要数次刷分才能达到理想的分数。究其原因,一方面是因为深受中式作文影响,另一方面也是因为自己的文字能力不足,导致短时间内无法拓展到足够的字数,所以今天小编邀请到了黄辉老师,让他来和大家分享如何顺利拓展作文字数。

  什么部分最需要拓展?

  雅思考试中的议论文,通常遵循introduction-body-conclusion(引言段-主体段-结论段)的“三部曲”。一般来说,最重要的是主体段落,其在雅思作文评分中也有很大的比重。我们来看一篇满分作文(9分)的评分标准:

  “presents a fully developed position in answer to the question with relevant, fully extended and well supported ideas”。

  这里的“fully extended / well supported”,就必须通过主体段来体现啦。

  如何进行拓展?

  小编此前和大家分享过,想要写出条理清晰的议论文,最好是采用中心句(topic sentence)+支持句(support sentences)的结构来进行丰满。而每一篇文章中至少要有两个主要段落,分两个观点来进行表达,这样也比较容易达到字数要求。

  至于这两个重要部分应该怎么写?评分标准很重要!

  1.Write a topic sentence for each paragraph you plan to write. Each topic sentence should relate to your thesis statement and introduce what the paragraph will be about. If you find that the topics you want to discuss do not support the thesis statement you have written, revise your thesis statement or reconsider your topic sentences.

  每个主体段都必须有一个明确的主题句。

  2.Write ideas that support your topic sentences. The topic sentence for each paragraph tells the reader what the paragraph will be about. The ideas stated in the rest of the paragraph should all relate to the topic sentence.

  支持句必须围绕主题句展开。

  各位烤鸭请划重点:每一个段落最好都采用总-分的结构来进行描写,就是一个主题句+若干个支持句,不要忘记每一段的总-分结构需要“嵌入”到整篇文章的总-分结构中哦~

  说到这里,我们来上例子:

  Hobbies are important for many reasons. First, a hobby can be educational. For example, if the hobby is stamp collecting, the person can learn about the countries of the world and even some of their history. Second, engaging in a hobby can lead to meeting other people with the same interests. A person can also meet other people by going to the school. Third, a person's free time is being used in a positive way. The person has no time to be bored or get into mischief while engaged in the hobby. Finally, some hobbies can lead to a future job. A person who enjoys a hobby-related job is more satisfied with life.

  这段话的topic sentence很明显-“Hobbies are important for many reasons”,

  之后的支持句从三方面阐述hobby的重要性(first, second, third),并用Finally进行段落总结。

  但段中这句话"A person can also meet other people by going the school"与hobby重要的原因没有关系,因此削弱了整个段落的连贯性与统一性,应该被去掉。

  大家不妨就着这两个原则进行作文拓展。你学会了吗?

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