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小编:成都环球教育 205首先声明,这是一篇很专注的解析雅思写作考题的文章。不敢谈专业,只敢言专注。因此文中不会有插图,各位看官见谅。
很多今年09-29参加考试的烤鸭们,原以为考完之后就可以安心度假了。没曾想,被这么一个“浪”题破坏了心情。的确这道题在近些年的题库中基本没有原型,虽然有类似题型但是话题也相距甚远。今天陆哲老师就带着大家一起手刃仇敌,从此快意江湖。
先来看看这道题,到底有多“浪”。
Team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities that are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 20180929
其实,也没有多“浪”。题干部分交代的很清晰。相比单独的活动,人们通过团队活动能学到更多的生活技能。问考生们同意与否。虽如此,这道题在审题阶段还是给各位考生挖了几个坑,在此咱们一一言明
第一,题中可没有说“教孩子”,那么如此一来那些针对school children的讨论恐怕就有些偏题了,往往只能是本文的例子而已。
第二,题干中有明显的比较级,就是强调团队活动和个体活动两者间的比较。所以这个“比较”二字应该在本文的论述阶段被突出。在此陆哲老师强调一个小问题:其实A比B教会我们的技能多,真的不是说B什么技能也不教给我们。在这样一篇突出“比较”的文章中,其实B到底教不教我们技能以及它具体教会我们什么技能不太重要。我们只要强调A可以教这个技能,但是B不行。这样就是比较的逻辑,也正是本文的论证逻辑。
第三,skills for live,这个概念比较清晰,但是不太具体。它可能包括的技能千千万万,我们在局促的篇幅和有限的时间之内不可能面面俱到。所以陆哲老师非常不建议考生们通过比较抽象的论述只针对这个生活技能讨论。相反,我希望大家可以通过具体的生活技能来把AB两种办法进行比较即可。这样的方式虽不严谨,但是绝对符合雅思写作的要求。也正因如此,本例文其实只针对了两个生活技能:团队意识和交流能力。
There is no doubt that during taking part in both individual and group activities participants are able to master or practice some life skills. Thus, the public is concerned about whether there are more similar skills that people can learn from doing some team activities than individual ones.
开头段,笔者先是通过一个背景的引入,进而介绍了全文讨论的主题。值得注意的是,笔者在开头段并没有表述自身的立场。其一,自身立场表述与否完全取决于笔者自身风格,没有强制要求。其二,本文逻辑非常简单,所以在此无需多言。
Primarily, being team members, people can readily understand the significance of team spirit. To win or accomplish a task successfully and smoothly, every team member should work together with might and main. As a result, what those team members can profoundly understand is what they can achieve in the team is far more than what they can do individually. This is definitely how people’s awareness of team work can be built. By contrast, being the only participant of an activity hardly can people understand how important team work is, since whatever they can gain merely depends on how many efforts they make. Hence, instead of the cooperative awareness, those people can probably only learn the individualistic heroism.
主一段,笔者就“团队意识”这个生活技能展开。整个论证方式突出了“对比”二字。先是说团队活动可以使参与者对团队意识有深刻理解,再解释为什么个体活动不能教会参与者这方面的技能。笔者本身认为这段有小的瑕疵,因为篇幅所致没有特别具体的例子。如果可以说说“勒布朗詹姆斯”总决赛为什么被横扫,可能全文会变得更加生动。多言一句,我要是詹姆斯,我就不去湖人,我去火箭。誓死要把“水花兄弟”和杜兰特掐死在西决,让他们一辈子再也进不了总决赛。(希望勇士的球迷不要骂我)
Additionally, some interpersonal communication skills can be greatly practiced while people work with others. Doing a cooperative activity, people need to express their own ideas first, and secondly be good listeners. After all team members voice their opinion, thirdly they will come to the discussion, where they are required to think critically, to make a compromise, and to be responsible. This is to say, during the whole process, the skills that those participants are practicing are exactly what they need to handle some difficulties and troubles in their lives. On the contrary, working alone makes them have to be the decision makers all the time, and consequently they might be sealed in a self-enclosed world.
主二段的论证逻辑和上一段如出一辙。先是说团队活动中,参与者可以提升交流技能。独自的活动自然没有交流机会。如此一来就论证了团队活动又多教会了我们一个生活技能。这段虽没有例子,但是论点展开阶段已经非常具体了,所以大可不必纠结于此。
On balance, this essay does not deny that people may learn some useful skills by solo activities, whereas according to the above analysis group activities are absolutely teaching participants more essential skills.
前文的论证逻辑非常简单明了,所以结论段自然就很清晰。首先,我绝不否认独立活动能教会我们一些技能(相关论证在本文的论证逻辑中根本不重要,所以我只字未提)。随后,笔者强调团队活动就是教会了我们更多的技能,以最直接的方式点明题目并且阐述立场。